Dear Malcolm: I have done a bit of editing on the draft for the Brown speech. Ann will send you a clean copy with this note.1
What I think this piece lacks is a distinct theme that sets forth the dimensions of a basic purpose and the vital importance of that purpose to the world. Throughout it there are found references to the importance of raising living standards for the masses of the world, of whom so many are hungry. I believe that we ought in unequivocal language state that there is an inescapable requirement for the so-called civilized nations to make this a mandatory purpose, taking priority over all others.2
A part of the theme would be that such nations must mobilize together if they are going to do the job well and efficiently. Against the background of this statement of purpose and the need to cooperate among governments to achieve that purpose, there should be shown that compared to this problem that of East-West relationships, arms races, and even the most important of domestic issues pale into insignificance.
I believe that if some such thought as this could be stated succinctly and unequivocally in the talk, the whole piece would hang together better because each of the things that we would talk about in the political, economic and intellectual worlds would fall into place.
As I say, I have worked over the thing editorially only. But I have not attempted to introduce the thought which is so inadequately expressed in this memorandum.
However, if we could do this, then I feel that it would be worth the time and trouble I might take to go to Brown to deliver this speech. Otherwise I think I should cancel.
I believe also that we have to make sure of our satisfaction with the Harvard talk because I cannot possibly cancel one without cancelling the other.3
As soon as you come back, I think we ought to get busy on both of these.4